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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
the sign read > > FUNERAL > > Come Any Time > > Services Held Round the Clock. these days almost any attire will do for a funeral but out of respect, she wore black from her head to her soul. the gravesite was hastily prepared for it happened so suddenly she was taken quite unaware. Her footsteps faltered, and stopped as she fought to hold on to something already gone but anger reached out slapped her in the face and pushed her through the door silence took her half the way there, and took the seat beside her but for the service she took grief by the arm as she made her way down the aisle she needed, I guess, a bit of strength to view the deceased. the burial was quick, but she stayed until it was completely over afraid, once again to face the door. the headstone, she thought, unnecessary, for the words were carved deep in her soul "herein lies my heart" [This message has been edited by fc (edited 01-19-2000).] |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is very good but sad  I could feel the emotion pouring from it |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Again another poignant and insightful work fc. Your writing is astounding. The way you reveal your feelings is majestic in it's simplicity.  [This message has been edited by Local Rebel (edited 01-19-2000).] |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
jsut wish it was as simple as writing a poem to fix in reality....but thanks for the compliments |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
In a castle dark or a fortress strong With chains upon my feet You know that ghost is me And I will never be set free As long as I'm a ghost that you can't see. HUSG sweetheart Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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simplyYRREHS Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 162 |
fc...you have breezed in here and taken us all! the style of your writing, the powerful emotions you are able to uncover and verbally play them in our heads...i'm simply wow'd. great, great poem. Sherry"Heaven is under our feet as well as over our heads." ~Henry David Thoreau |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
yep rainbow, you were right, if no one else but you and me....it fits perfect...thank you...hugs back thank you sherry....glad you like |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
So many phrases grabbed my heart... but I can't pick a favorite from a poignant whole... just say WOW! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Applauding!!! Rest assured, with the two from you I have seen, I will be looking forward to many more. Excellent writing At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet. ~Plato |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
thanks again suthern a wow from you means a lot hoot...your applause makes me smile |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I must say, fc - You're quite a master at the use of imagery: personification, metaphor, extended metaphor... they're all there - in quite an astounding message... Do keep those posts coming.... |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
lol finally got a smile out of me, thanks nan....but no, I am a master at none, can't even remember what most of those things are...lol...I just write poems in my head when my feet can't sleep, this one was born under the stars at 2 in the morning |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
Outstanding poem fc ... I wish it were not a true story and I could just enjoy your talent ... HUGS |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
Great post Rainbow .. you're a priceless friend .. |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
well can't leave here today without saying thanks JTF and leaving a ditto on your last post....that she is, that she is..... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This one tore at my heart...you have my sympathies. Excellent writing. Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-20-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is such a strong and emotional poem. Excellent Writing! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This is a reality I wish I'd never been through. I've never heard such heartache put so beautifully I must say. You definantly have a way with words!! HUGS! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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