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A Few More Miles
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A Few More Miles |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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Hot...dry...thirsty. Must find water! Very thirsty. The sun...the gates of hell...open. Ah! A tree, a cactus, a...a...doesn't matter. A little shade...a little rest...just a little rest. Must get up. Must keep going. Must find the ship. Over the next hill. Has to be...over the next hill. He said it would be in this direction perhaps a little further. Ouch! You fool! Why don't you watch you're doing? Whats that? The ship? It must be! Go down this hill, cross that dry lake and...buildings? Towers? What kind of place is this? A road? At las, people. Oh, it cracked. Covered with weeds. Weeds through the cracks Nobody here anymore. Nobody, for a long time. Still, it must be the ship. A white needle set to leap to the stars on a whisper. Had forgotten what it...it's moving? NO! NO! Wait for me! NO...it's just the heat...the damn heat! A few miles....only a few more miles. ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Smiling at this one, Echo!  Love the self~talk, hope, disappointment, renewed determination...really intriguing piece! Claire |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I like this one too, love the self talk as well. well done! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Glad you liked it, I don't usually write prose, but well, I did ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Echo- I LOVE IT ! Now, seems we should see more of it. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Oh, I like this one, Echo. It is an excellent representaion of inner frustration and despair. Whew! A lot can be read into this one. |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
I am so thirsty, I just need to go get some water I hope I can make it.  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I enjoyed this Echo...I can remember feeling like this a few times!! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This is a different one from you! I like it...we do just that to keep ourselves going sometimes don't we? Way to go sweetie! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Marge, you mean you actually want to see more? *reaching for your forehead* are you sick or soemthing?? LoL Balladeer, Thank you most kindly. There is a lot in this one, more than it represents, but I wont go into that LoL Paul, I hope you made it and got some water =) Denise, phew, glad it's not just me =) Rebecca, it is different from my usual style isn't it? Like I said before, I am not much of a prose writer, but sometimes, that just how it comes out =) ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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