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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2000-01-16 02:44 AM

-spinning songs to the clouds-
Rain is a dream.
A pebblespotted waterflow of emerald wash.
Imagine it bathing the mountains, the hillsides;
Glistening scrub, melted freeways.
Out here in California, it hardly ever rains.

The sky is touched by the crowns of palms.
There aren't many clouds, but a vastless vastness.
Reflections on mirrored facades pouring reflections,
Painting in abstract, earthless perfection.

And, while driving to work, another traffic knot,
I sing in my car to the radio's wishes,
Spinning notes and soul to the sky,
To become in time a cloud.

A lonesome, beautiful reminder of ambition
To make it beyond what's just in view.
Never stopping to fear its eventual poetry:

Burning off, losing small and larger pieces,
Writing out names in temporary contrails.
A final cotton thread over a shadowless sea.

Astraea
Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now

1 posted 2000-01-16 04:04 AM

Wow... Very nice, and lots of strong words... And a reference to CA [and I want rain here! This state needs a little more variety in the weather!]. Me like. Very lovely.

~Astraea

"Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 2000-01-17 08:29 PM

I like your use of imagery here! Good one.

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

3 posted 2000-01-17 09:36 PM

I enjoyed this very much...nice imagery!!

Take Care
Bridgette

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2000-01-17 11:26 PM

Glad you all liked it. And Astraea, be careful what you wish for. It's been pouring here aaaalll day.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

5 posted 2000-01-18 01:55 AM

Nice imagery and there's nothing wrong with rain

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

6 posted 2000-01-19 01:27 AM

I agree, hoot_owl. Unforunately, Californians CANNOT drive in the rain. There's double the accidents on the freeways. And natives will readily admit this (when they're busy not lurching into airbags, that is

).

Mike

SnglDad
Member

since 2000-01-08

Posts 115
Seattle area

7 posted 2000-01-19 02:09 AM

Very well written bsquirrel.
And I have to agree, there is nothing wrong with rain,unless you live here in Seattle.
You`ve done a great job at giving other`s a
Vision of the California Hywys.
Thanx For Sharing and God Bless

Joel

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

8 posted 2002-05-22 07:19 PM

Ooo, the poem that was my tagline for a bi'. And a new question comes t' laht -- why am ah so bored that ah'm replying to ancient posts? oh, right -- shirkin' work!

Such a poet ah am.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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