Open Poetry #5 |
Burning Love |
Lynn Burdette Junior Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 25Greensboro, Georgia ( I'm a Georgia peach!) |
Coals burning in a fire, Reminds me of love I once desired. Burning, burning I will not forget, The love I experienced, I came to regret. My heart, was broken only by you, Like a rose that was torn into. The pain I felt in my chest, was very strong I must confess. The fun we shared, the laughs, the bliss, I really wish I didn't miss. The words we'd said, the things we'd done, I only wish had never begun. So, the flames in my soul will someday go out. I know it for sure without a doubt. Because those flames will be replaced, By someones touch, love and embrace. For now I will wait quietly by the fire, with the burning of the love I once desired. Lynn Burdette [This message has been edited by Lynn Burdette (edited 01-15-2000).] |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
How lovely...and beautifully spoken. Very nice. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
I'm burning up over here! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lynn- Take a bow .. this is stunning. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lynn- Take a bow .. this is stunning. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lynn I liked this very much. Wonderful title and it kept on burning. James |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas |
Beautiful poem, lovely sentiments. The piece was well crafted. One suggestion, if I may? In verse three, line four, would replacing "never" with "not" smooth out a slight catch? No offense, and not ctiticizing...lovely work. |
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