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Lynn Burdette Junior Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 25Greensboro, Georgia ( I'm a Georgia peach!) |
Teardrops by:Lynn Burdette Teardrops, teardrops in my eye, softly flowing as we say good-bye. You reach and touch the tear as it falls And kiss my lips as I stand tall. Trying not to show my pain, I whisper softly your sweet name. Teardrops, teardrops in my eye, softly flowing as we say good-bye. My face is wet and my heart is blue. The pain inside, if you only knew. I smile a fake smile as I look at your face. I know my memories cannot be replaced. Teardrops, teardrops in my eye, Softly flowing as we say good-bye. Please hurry and go for I cannot contain the teardrops that fall they fall like rain. As I watch you leave, I wave to you and hope these teardrops turn to dew. Teardrops, teardrops in my eye, Softly flowing as we say good-bye. Lynn Burdette |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Wow...reminds me of a lot of memories... Very lovely. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
This is precious so very sweet thanks again a real treat Earthman |
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Rus Bowden Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 139 |
Hi Lynn, Great use of refrain, so simple and moving. Rus |
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CrazyChick Member
since 2000-01-05
Posts 132 |
Great work, well written !!! |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
I give you two thumbs up on this one. The way you portray your emotions is lovely. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I could feel the fake smile, I think I smiled that way before Good poem, I loved it Liz |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas |
Ditto, to the above. A very bitter-sweet rendition of memory. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I like your poem very much.What a lovely poem.Keep it up.  |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great poem and very moving! Nathan |
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gary marshall New Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 4Nottingham.UK |
Very lovely poem, enjoyed it very much. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Lynn and I love the use of the repetition. So many teardrops.... Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lynn, Enjoyed the read. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I really liked the sing songiness to this!! I thought it was very pretty!! I liked and enjoyed this very much!! It was sooo sad, and similar to how I've felt before!! Take Care, Bridgette |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lynn- This is a beautifully written piece. The flow is rhymic and lyrically lovely. By golly, I think I like it very much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
So simple and direct....feelings flow here like the tears. Very nice Drive it like you stole it...LOL |
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Lynn Burdette Junior Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 25Greensboro, Georgia ( I'm a Georgia peach!) |
I want to thank each and everyone of you for your nice replies. It really is encouraging to hear such great comments from all of you. I hope you all continue to enjoy all of my poems. Everything that I write comes straight from my heart and is a experience that I have had sometime in my life. Thanks again everyone! Lynn Burdette |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Very beautiful and comforting to the teardrops in my eyes! |
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