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Open Poetry #5

you slipped away

stephen j
Junior Member

since 2000-01-15

Posts 21

0 posted 2000-01-15 04:14 AM

YOU SLIPPED AWAY.

BY STEPHEN J

i had you in my arms,
but you slipped away.

i had you in my reach,
but you took a step back.

you were on the top of a hill,
but the path was to steep.

you were at the bottom of the ocean,
but i couldnt swim that deep.

i had you in my arms,
but you slipped away.

[This message has been edited by stephen j (edited 01-15-2000).]

amber
Member

since 1999-06-15

Posts 240
los banos, ca,

1 posted 2000-01-15 04:15 AM

I enjoyed your poem very much, i remember how it feels to have somthing so sure, and you dont realize how much you want it until its gone. That feeling of regret can eat someone up. Welcome to passions and i will enjoy reading your future posts.

whiskey

Senior Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 1278
Australia

2 posted 2000-01-15 11:19 AM

This is great , wonderful peom , These feelings are not nice at all , I wish you all the best

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2000-01-23 08:33 PM

I liked this poem Stephen. This happens to me quite a bit. I'm going to keep trying til I find one that sticks. James

[This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 01-23-2000).]

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

4 posted 2000-01-24 10:33 AM

I really enjoyed this..a lot said in few words

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