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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2000-01-14 09:42 PM


     Of what I bear and host

When deep in slumber in my chair,
Living phantoms, visit me there.
They race across my visions plain,
Like cattle through a field of grain.

They trample me to blades of grief.
They rob me of my sleeps relief.
They shred my thoughts of honest mourn,
Gracing times of once and gone.

Bovine ferocity, they run in line,
Ravage the peace that I would mine.
Raising dust like deeds recast,
As if, they could retrieve the past.

Nor can I stop their repertory,
Their flamboyant, oratory.
Each phantom spits coercing doubt,
In balls of fire flaring out.

I damn the ghosts their blatancy,
Their malicious effigy,
I tire of the gruesome jest
And tire of their loathsome quest.

What's gone is gone can't be redone.  
I can't undo what I have done.


© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2000-01-15 12:03 PM


Sy,
It's hard to fathom your unrest
Your visions nightmarish, at best
Can't believe that you'd beget
Any deed to your regret
As for the poem, it's classic you
Well written, wonderful and true.
As always, great poetry
Liz

Balladeer
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2 posted 2000-01-15 12:12 PM


Nice read, Sy
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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northern mountains, Idaho
3 posted 2000-01-15 12:18 PM


This stops me cold in my tracks.  Oh, man.  And the ending lines: "What's gone is gone can't be redone.   I can't undo what I have done." So true, so heartrendingly true.  Chilling.  Excellent.  Thank you.



 ...Living is ever like crossing rivers; finding a new life on each shore ... RJG



Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

4 posted 2000-01-15 12:27 PM



And you say you had this dream in your chair? Might consider toning down the spicy foods, Sy.  

Excellent poem, by the way...
"Raising dust like deeds recast"...I love this line!

Dear LadyClaire




~ViXeN~
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since 2000-01-09
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Guelph, Ont. Canada
5 posted 2000-01-15 12:33 PM


wow this is really good. =-)
i really especially liked the last two lines.
makes ya really think back....
excellent!

HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
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Canada
6 posted 2000-01-15 09:01 AM


To add a comment line or two
Would be like "Bringing the Owl to Athen"
Or "Gold to the Swiss". (hope I remember histroy right   )
There is a lot said already.
Well written and the end...well yes speechless here.


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


whiskey
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7 posted 2000-01-15 10:07 AM


Sy, This is yet another great poem, Well done thanks for the read  
Nan
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8 posted 2000-01-15 11:05 AM


Sy - You make me smile ..... you truly do..

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
9 posted 2000-01-15 06:06 PM


Liz,
I think it has something to do with the years
of 42 to 45. Love ya Sy.
Balladeer,
Thank you friend.
Rosemary,
Glowing words, thank you so much.
Meadow,
Very nice coment, thank you.
Vixen,
Thank you for the excellent.
Helmut,
glad you enjoyed it, thanks.
Wiskey,
Glad you enjoyed the read, thank you.
Nan,
Thank you for the kiss it was delicious. *L* Sy

Marge Tindal
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10 posted 2000-01-15 06:19 PM


Seymour-
I want you to know that I always read
what you write ...
just sometimes I'm not sure of how to
reply to something that troubles you so.

This is one of those times.

Love, we all have demons that confront us
from time to time ... I send you a hug
to pull around you at times that you
are troubled.

My love to you ...
for all you've gone through.
You have to be an okay kinda guy ...
when the atrocities stay to haunt you
for so long.  
I'm sorry for your pain, my friend.
Love ~Marge~

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Denise
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Posts 22648

11 posted 2000-01-15 09:04 PM


I feel your pain, Seymour.  
Wonderful poem, as usual!!< !signature-->

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~



[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-16-2000).]

Rus Bowden
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 139

12 posted 2000-01-15 09:33 PM


Sy,

Such a picture!  A gruesome haunting stampede of fire while in your chair and such simple words in your final couplet.  My my.

Rus

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