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Doors (reposted for Queen - RainbowGirl)
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Doors (reposted for Queen - RainbowGirl) |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion 
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Queen - here's the poem - only slightly reworked to make it flow better in some of the rough spots - I hope you enjoy. I dreamt last night of an endless hall, With an infinity of doors along each wall. Each door was open, some just a crack, Upon each a sign, "Don't look back." The suggestive signs made me turn, To see what behind me I could learn. But what I saw when I looked back: No hall, no doors, no floor, just black. And so I turned back to the fore, And thus approached the nearest door. The sign was engraved on a silver plate, Each word emblazed of gold inlaid. A voice warned me, "If you enter here, The other doors will disappear." And so in fear of choosing wrong, I closed that door and moved along. Each new door echoed the first one's call, So I closed each I passed down that hall. When I turned to see the doors I'd latched: No hall, no doors, no floor, just black. A chilling pulse ran down my spine, As I turned again to the door-lined hall that ran into infinity, And beckoned with doors opened for me. I ran headlong in maddened flight, Down that hall of enticing lights. And as my panic drove me on, Each door slammed closed, and then was gone. I realized the doors that I passed by, Delimited the passing of my life. The signs were there to give peace of mind, When I chose to leave that hall behind. I stopped at last, and again turned back: No hall, no doors, no floor, just black. But this time I breathed a deeper breath, And walked through this door to my rest. Walk slowly down your doorlined hall, You'll know your door when it calls. And when you choose, you'll finally be At no hall, no doors, no floor; just peace. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
How can I type when I'm busy applauding? *S* |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Thank you, lil Belle |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Wow!! This piece is truly exceptional Lng Jhn! I too, applaud you Sir!!!!! I'm saving this in my favorites.... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
LJA: Thanks for that, I love it as much this time as I did last...truly superb! HUSG Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
Hey Sailor, I've been told you picked up the door with the sign saying "Hooters" ...  Wonderful poem ... "I ran headlong in maddened flight, Down that hall of enticing lights" ... I love these 2 lines ..  |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh man, LongJohn. This gave me chills at first, then brought tears to my eyes. Beautiful piece. What a powerful message. Tipping my hat. Michael |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Stunning poem. Very well thought out and much deeper than could be expressed in a few lines. |
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Rus Bowden Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 139 |
Hi LngJhnAg, A frightful journey of doors closing and opportunities lost. Great read. Rus |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Pepper - thank you for that wonderful comment. Saving a poem is the best of compliments. Queen - At your service, m'Lady. Whatever you wish, may it come to be. Jef - LMAO@Hooters door - Man! That was a classic comeback! lol Hey there, Michael. Yanoo, we sailors and sailors-to-be gotta support each other. Thanks for the read on the poem's effect. Often, we get compliments on style, but - OH - those comments on affect. . . . spiked - thanks much for that read - sometimes it does take more lines - I often marvel at the poets who can express more with fewer lines - now, THAT is real talent. Rus - yanno - the original intent of this poem when I started writing it was exactly that - I wanted to write about how our choices close some doors while they open others. Somehow, I got sidetracked (as I often do when I write) and it became a story of how we choose to find our final rest. Thanks for seeing that deeply into my motivation for this poem. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is quite the extended metaphor for life, m'dear.... Nice job indeed... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Well written piece, and enjoyable to read. Flows very smoothly. I, too, am applauding! Liz |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Nan - A compliment from you is the ultimate affirmation that, just maybe, I did something right. Thank you, kind Lady. Ms. Santos - Thank you, too. Don't close the wrong door. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
*clap clap clap* Bravo! Exquisite poem! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
How did I miss this one.......this is fantastic, Mike! |
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lasexycat New Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 5Louisiana |
WOW! Still have goose bumps. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Lessee?...I was gonna post something about "Behind the Green Door".....The "Door" to the Mustang Ranch....Or Monty Hall, that hall, door one two or three.....but I guess that this one has so much class and was even better than what I'd usually expect from you that I'll just let the crude comments slide...well done Mike.....you truly have a talent when you're not trying to chastize me...... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This is definitely a keeper, Mike, one of your best. Just ignore all those jealous folks making silly jokes! They just wish their dreams would hold half of what this poem has told! Corinne |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOW....Wonderful poem!!!!! |
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CrazyChick Member
since 2000-01-05
Posts 132 |
Great work!!! I really enjoyed this one |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LngJhnAg- This is just an intriguing piece of work. It reaffirms what my grandmother always told me ... 'Close one door behind you before you knock on another.' A truly wonderful look at those doors. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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