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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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The sun shines brightly most everyday as I walk in the park and watch the children play. But yesterday, as I walked away an unhappy feeling came my way to stay. A young woman was sitting on a park bench alone. You could tell that she had nowhere to call home. Each day she was there as Autumn leaves fell by her appearance I could tell she wasn't doing too well I saw through my eyes, she was feeble and slight and she sat there alone; on a park bench she sighed As the days grew shorter and winter fiercly arrived I wonder if this woman would be able to survive The loneliness was evident in the woman's somber eyes I gave her my lunch; on a park bench she cried The winter was long and the cold winds blew As I walked in the park, in my heart I just knew The woman who lived here had closed her ashen eyes she went to sleep; on a park bench she died Spring has finally arrived the children are playing the skies have turned blue and the trees are swaying As I stop at the bench I remember her eyes the tears they just fall; on a park bench I cried ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Echo, this is sad!!! I can relate to this one, I feel the same way, not only with people, but also all those helpless animals with no where to go...If I had it my way, I'd have a house full of various pets  You've expressed yourself beautifuly yet again!!!Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Melanie ... what a lovely heart you have. Expressed this soooooo beautifully. Made me cry at the thought of anyone with no home. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thank you two, this one means quite a lot to me really, I am glad you liked it! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Melanie: If only more people would take the time to really see what is in front of them... Big HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, Melanie and shows your loving heart! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Bbuzz Member
since 1999-12-17
Posts 76Washinton State |
Bless your heart Melanie. I had a similar experience,fortunately with a happier ending. You made me cry for her and you. Well Done! |
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Rus Bowden Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 139 |
Hi Melanie, Oh so nearly in tears I am right now. This moved well right to the very end, with just the right amount revealed as it went. Rus |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
What a beautiful heart you have and what a wonderful poem Liz |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
What a wonderful heart you have, such a sad poem |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Melanie WOW! What a moving poem! Very well expressed! Tear-jerker! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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maedavid Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 24Carrollton, TX, USA |
Very beautiful and touching poem. No one knows how many lives are touched by such a beautiful poem. The one way we can get out of our own miseries is to help someone else with theirs. God Bless You. You have such a great talent. Keep on writing. The only way to know Love, is to Know God. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
So sensitive and touching...and too often unaddressed. You've brought homelessness, through your poem, to a very real place, and I thank you for offering a wider vision.  Claire |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang, this is so sad  |
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fatelfemm New Member
since 2008-07-16
Posts 1 |
My god that had me crying , just thinking of that and knowing how it feels to be homeless , hits home. It's great to see someone in my home town that writes so well. Keep up to great work. |
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