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spiked
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0 posted 2000-01-14 12:50 PM


The Path

I hurt, I’m sad
Angry and mad
I feel out of control
I want so much to see
The one I love it burn’s my soul
I travel down this path
To get where I must go
To reach the person I’ve
Searched so long to find.
To feel, to know.
A love that has no boundaries,
No limits, no lows.
This love I’ve found opens me to who I am.
It shows me how much my values mean to me.
No lies just love, true love.



© Copyright 2000 Richard Rendall - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 2000-01-14 07:43 AM


I surely hope you find it, spiked....
Denise
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2 posted 2000-01-14 03:18 PM


Well, I haven't found a love that perfect here on earth, but I sure do hope you come close!!!!  

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~



spiked
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3 posted 2000-01-14 03:22 PM


Thank you Nan and Denise. I wrote this for my girlfriend a couple of years ago. it was written in a few seconds without thought just moved the pencil on the paper and let it go as it wanted.

 Richard Rendall

Bbuzz
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4 posted 2000-01-14 08:20 PM


Spiked, There may be love without boundaries and limits, but trust me, there is no love without lows. I'm old,I know! Thank you for sharing.  P.S. You're right, love has no lies.
spiked
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5 posted 2000-01-14 08:28 PM


As I have found out many times over the lows just make the highs that much higher
Thanks

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6 posted 2000-01-14 08:49 PM


Richard-

It is beautifully written.
And I like the way the
'pencil moved over the paper'
that's good enough for me.
~*Marge*~

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Rus Bowden
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7 posted 2000-01-14 09:56 PM


hi spiked,

the greatest thing about this pem is that your feelings went down so honestly, and then you are still together after two years.  what a story behind a poem!

rus

Alwye
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8 posted 2000-01-14 10:23 PM


It's definitely the honesty that makes this even more so a great poem than it originally would be.  Wonderful work, keep it up.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha


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