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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Censored words apprehensive solitary procrastinated agitation regurgitated phobias reactive determination.. Soul winds breathing deep refreshing clarity reviving spirit swallowing nourishment. Passionate writing escaping thoughts climbing motivation elevating emotions creative liberation. Psychological effects levitating plain spirted highs spontaneous revival soothing accomplishments. Meditating quiet surviving answers ocean breezes mental waves questioning reassurance. Exhilarated stimulation monumental achievement challenged horizon abstract self-portrait finding definition. Masterful presentation individualistic performance peer acclamation defining moment unleashed contentment. D.Lester Young The beauty of liberal arts is that I can see conservative ideas and respect them but still see the open sky of exploring my own mind. 11/13/03 |
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hush Senior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 1653Ohio, USA |
Okay, try not to take this too personally, but this seems like a long collection of phrases that unltimately add up to nothing more substantial than an ego-stroke. Let me explain: 'Censored words apprehensive solitary procrastinated agitation regurgitated phobias reactive determination..' The author/narrator feels affronted when people tell him "you can't say that here..." and revels in the rogue loner role. And the rest is basically how this narrator 'refreshes clarity' by apparently rising above, refusing to sink to their level, and pleases himself by writing himself onto an enlightened plain, where poetry (evidently) flows forth from the mind, unfettered from pragmatic concerns, eventually leading to: 'Masterful presentation individualistic performance peer acclamation defining moment unleashed contentment.' Well... if you are writing a poem that tells us how good your poetry is, believe me, it's not that good. I'm not even going to give this one affirmation, let alone acclamation. I suggest that you find something more substantial to write about, and focus your ability to collect phrases (preferably at leat a little better-flowing and less disconnected than these) and work from there. Hope I've helped. |
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