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rose
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since 2003-08-02
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0 posted 2003-08-09 01:20 PM


Trembling


A scrap of tissue paper,
soft and red
with edges, torn, that blur into the very air,
spins a silent song
as the wind
holds it in her palm
carries it far along
on her chilly breath—
The paper is not
only singing now, but
dancing, too—
It will fly to the clouds,
but they will consume it!
eat it, drink its color.
I cannot bear to witness its demise.


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mircasaster
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since 2003-08-08
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1 posted 2003-08-09 01:59 PM


Hello, Rose, I hope that you are doing well today.  I believe that this is a very imaginative poem.  The expression of emotion is very good throughout the entire poem, and it flows in fluid movement throughout the poem as well.  Thank you for posting this poem, I thought it was very well written.
j0n4th4n
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since 2003-03-11
Posts 94

2 posted 2003-08-11 03:42 AM


this is lovely.. i love the detail and that line especially about the edges blurring into the very air.

what is the significance of the tissue paper? i'm curious to know.

can i ask, how do you do those long lines at the end of a word?

rose
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since 2003-08-02
Posts 53

3 posted 2003-08-14 06:54 PM


thanks for your replies, guys
the significance of the tissue paper is actually a friendship of mine that was wobbling uncertainly...
to do the long lines at the end of the word, hit the dash key (upper right-hand corner of keyboard) twice and hit enter or simply continue typing and it should automatically make the long line. i think.
again, thanks for taking the time to reply.
~rose

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