Critical Analysis #2 |
New Green |
Ladybug Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 236Massachusetts |
(Experimenting with a mixture of 3/5/3 and 5/7/5 haiku forms) --------------- New Green 5/26/03 Vibrant green leaves escape from tall dark prisons Through Winter’s slumber they slept under heavy arms; sheltered from the light Yellow keys unlock Spring’s secret; freed from grey Green hands reach upward giving thanks to their golden savior in the sky Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end... [This message has been edited by Ladybug (07-15-2003 04:59 PM).] |
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tepidlake New Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 3Utah |
I think it's great! Often the smaller things in life don't get enough attention. This poem makes me think about what it must be like to be a leaf, which is something that hadn't really occured to me before. It's a beautiful little poem. Thanks! [This message has been edited by tepidlake (07-16-2003 02:18 AM).] |
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Ladybug Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 236Massachusetts |
Thanks, tepidlake! I'm honored to be your first post and welcome to PIP! Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end... |
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tepidlake New Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 3Utah |
Thanks for the welcome, Ladaybug. This is a great forum! I'm so glad I stumbled onto it. I've been reading all of the posts in here, and I am so impressed by everyone. I hope that no one minds if I hang around. I only wish that I had more time so that I could write something to everyone. But, I'll try to in due time. Thank you, Ladybug. [This message has been edited by tepidlake (07-16-2003 10:54 PM).] |
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Ladybug Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 236Massachusetts |
Tepidlake, of course no one minds if you hang around (speaking for the group, of course, hee hee) -- seriously! I, too, am impressed with PIP and so far (since June) have enjoyed myself and met some nice people. Stick around! Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end... |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Dear Ladybug, This was a delight...a very well-written, simple poem about nature (a favorite subject of mine). I enjoyed. Kris "It is wisdom to know others; |
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Ladybug Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 236Massachusetts |
Awww, thanks Warmhrt! Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end... |
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