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Critical Analysis #2

Life

David Carrson
Junior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 25
Carrickfergus N. Ireland

0 posted 2003-06-23 06:45 PM

Life

To me life is a river
Which each one of us must cross
It's rushing icy waters
A mass of heave and toss.
From sleepy little eddys
To torrents full of pace
Like the problems we encounter
And do our best to face.
Now the only things that help us
Reach the other side
Are the stepping stones and islets
Scattered far and wide.
Some we know are solid
Sturdy strong and high,
Their tops well out of danger
Safe and sure and dry.
But others aren't so helpful
They're slimy wet and green,
Waiting to upend us
Into dangers yet unseen.
So we jump from one to other
And at times we're sure to slip
For all of us have troubles
And we're bound to take a dip.
But if we're really lucky
And we reach that far off shore
Where all our pains and worries
Will trouble us no more,
Then look back across the river
When the sun of life has set
And if we've been really lucky
Then we didn't get too wet.

ladywrytr
Junior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 10
Southeastern MA

1 posted 2003-06-27 09:49 AM

I really enjoyed this poem, great visuals, felt myself trying not to fall off of those slick moss-covered rocks. Of course in my river, there were crocodiles too. Nicely done. The only minor thing I found was the repetition of the words "really lucky". Perhaps we could just assume making it to the other side (cause we all do). I hope I am not too vague here. Kim

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