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Critical Analysis #2

Daughter of Two

babygurl55
Junior Member

since 2003-05-28

Posts 18

0 posted 2003-06-17 06:16 PM

My daughter of two
Still so knew
As she sits there
And just stares up at the sky
I look at her
And notice all the things she brings me
She brings kindness and love
Happieness an hope
And when she turns
And looks at me with those big beautiful eyes
All I can say is
I love you!

kadafi09
Member

since 2003-06-17

Posts 143
California, United States

1 posted 2003-06-17 06:19 PM

beautiful description of a person that you love
great job

Ladybug
Member

since 2003-06-17

Posts 236
Massachusetts

2 posted 2003-06-17 06:43 PM

Very beautiful poem! Just a few minor spelling errors, but other than that, it was really sweet! (-:

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

Not A Poet
Member Elite

since 1999-11-03

Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA

3 posted 2003-06-17 08:31 PM

Hi BG,

Welcome to the forum. It is hard to critique any poem so loaded with persnal, emotional value so I just won't try. I'm kind of reluctant to jump on a first post anyway. Enjoy the group and I hope to see more from you soon.

Pete

topsyturveychick
Member

since 2003-01-19

Posts 57
Bris,QLD,Aus

4 posted 2003-06-18 01:10 AM

heya...this really shows how much u love ur little girl...great poem..welcome too...

I asked God how much he loved me...
He said this much...
And streched out his arms and Died.

**Sunshine**

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