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nobody Junior Member
since 2003-05-19
Posts 43 |
some people write about life or death whats the point,theyre the facts of our existance some just it in hospital,collecting sadness when they could get the joy of the people they love a girl lies in a darkened room,holding the knife to her wrist all because she feels her lifes gone to waste the tramp begging on the street,tryin to keep alive food is the biggest worry of their existence an old woman lies dying,having lived her life to the full but it was a waste and she nos it she waits for her chariot to come,to take her up hi but nothing comes,and as her soul dies she retreats into the blackness of death to join everyone else in their clouded illusions _________________ what do you think?? [This message has been edited by Nan (06-24-2003 07:45 AM).] |
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kadafi09 Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 143California, United States |
a very emotional poem i truly felt it to my core it shows beautifully the problems we face today great job |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Honestly, I find it too full of typos, misspellings and gramar errors to be of much interest. Try cleaning it up first and then ask about its merrits. Pete |
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