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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA 
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Rickety the bridge from reality is Afraid I was to cross that chasm Into blue light of sorrow and away from the spun-gold slumber threads of waking time - a tiny sleepwalker sloshing puddles of tidal tears. Bring not thy staff of councils upon my unprotected scarred back, when I turn my back on 'morrows yet unknown and cancerous eve's. For I have lost my way - blindfolded with unslippable knots and wander aimlessly, sightless thru The Land of Lost Dreams [This message has been edited by ShadowRider (03-21-2002 02:37 AM).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Jeff darling boy this is exceptional writing, utterly utterly brilliant. You have truly outdone yourself this time. Every single word in this is utterly perfect, you’ve really nailed this Rarely is writing this good, certainly this far exceeds my expectations and my expectations for you are always high. YOU are a very good writer and this proves it. The presentation is brilliant, well done darling boy this is exquisite. That is the only way I know to critique, accentuate the positive, and I’m positive about this, it is an excellent poem and deserves wide acclaim   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Every once in a great while i nail one, and i hope this was one out of 100 missed free-throws, so to speak (weak basketball metaphor) Do you know that the hardest thing, is to critique your own work? I see only the flaws....sigh Thankx Maaaaaaasha. Your smile in your words shows!  |
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