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edh Member
since 2003-03-26
Posts 111 |
I once had arches. I was a place to eat. A gateway bridge. A foot......in the door of those buildings is a man standing. I can see him. He looks as if he had had a gun. He would shoot it. I would not walk to him without my arches. Suppose I crawled. Just suppose for a minute that another Man is standing at the door. Behind the first man. In front of him. It doesn't matter. There is another man there. I can see him. Their love for each other is boundless and timeless. Yet one man is pushing on the door while the other is pulling. I saw the two men let go of the door and embrace. And I saw so many men try to get into the building and so many men try to get out. Some wanted to eat. Some wanted to stop eating. I got my arches fixed by a doctor. Doctor Love. Doctor God. He wasn't in the building where the men were eating. Nor was he outside waiting for a table. He was preparing the meals. And fixing the arches. Dedicated to Carl Gustav |
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Galena Junior Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 10 |
Is this a poem about 2 gay men holding up a mcdonalds? No seriously though, I'm not sure what arches has to do with the men..maybe I"m just out of it though. As far as the sound it sounded really good, Galena |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Greetings edh, I don't really get this? I admit that this is beyond me, maybe it's just me though? SG |
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Kamala Member
since 2003-04-17
Posts 59CA, USA |
Edh, at first it seemed like you were anthropomorphizing a mcdonalds, which is a cool idea. especially in first person. but then i got as confused as SimplyGold. i think there are some gay guys in there and a hold-up... and then maybe a repairman fixing the arches? anyway, i think you're really trying to talk about something else -- completely apart from the imagery perhaps? possibly a larger, over-arching metaphor or allegory? in any case, i didn't get it. if we were face to face, i would ask what you were trying to say? and hopefully we could discuss from there. i mean, it's definitely got me intrigued, i just have no shagging clue how to crack the thing. Kamala "At times, indeed, almost ridiculous-- |
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maverick55 Junior Member
since 2003-04-14
Posts 36Texas |
I have to agree with the confusion here. Can't find where it is going... keep losing the connections. |
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Seth Member
since 2003-04-13
Posts 74Arizona |
I think the idea is great, I have read this poem so many times that it is starting to grow in me. I like it...but it needs some work. Keep this one in the dryer as it still has some wrinkles.(just make that up, I think) Some parts of the poem flow really well, and others seem to lie there refusing to wake up and explain themselves. Love this poem some more and we will all be happier in the morning. ~Seth |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
seems to be from what i see a huge metaphor on love and God... "Their love for each other is boundless and timeless. Yet one man is pushing on the door while the other is pulling." and how some, not meaning too, prevent others from enjoying God's "meals". Its an interesting poem anyhow, will have to re-read it to understand it better though.... "more than yesterday, less than tomorrow, i love you" |
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edh Member
since 2003-03-26
Posts 111 |
Well I don't usually explain myself because in some cases there are metaphors which it takes even me much time to understand. Think about the realtionship of the ego and the id and the two men in the poem. The battle of the flesh and the spirit inside peoples hearts and how it affects their relationship to God. Or even think about relationships that people actually have with others and how even those relationships open and close doors. Doors to things we want or wish for "eating" or things that we do not wish for "to stop eating". The main point is the dualistic relationship that can divide and conquer the self. Or even cure. "I got my arches fixed." |
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