Shadow and Light (repost from other board, b/c I posted it in the wrong place)

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Shadow and Light (repost from other board, b/c I posted it in the wrong place)

Darkfire k'Sheyna
Junior Member

since 2003-03-20

Posts 26
Maryland, U.S.A.

0 posted 2003-03-22 10:13 PM

Shadow and Light
The lady was fair and followed the light,
Her lover was dark and lived in the night
Their romance they knew was doomed from the start
Yet they didn’t care, they followed their heart

A flaxen haired beauty, noble was she
A courteous, gentle, proper lady
She came from a family ancient and proud
They disliked her love, their protests were loud

A prince of the darkness, slender and lithe
He lived off of theft, was skilled with the knife.
Unlawful and wild, used to deceit
He thrived upon shadows, his home was the street.

Their love seemed eternal, supple and strong
Yet they were so diff’rent, it couldn’t last long
His craft was a dark one, riddled with strife
A thief in the night; she feared for his life.

One eve he was caught, and thrown into jail
His sentence was death, the lady did wail
All of her pleas, her cries went for naught
The evening before, his presence she sought

He comforted her through the bars of his cell
And with heavy heart, he bid her farewell
The guards came for him, they came for her thief
They ushered her out, her head bowed in grief

The morning arrived, all silent and chill
She went to the scaffold, her face pale and still
The noose went round his neck, a tear slipped from her eye
And she silently cursed those who caused him to die.

I posted this on the other board before I realized there was a seperate one for in-depth critiques, which I would like. Please feel free to critique this however you like!
-Darkfire-

Little_One
Junior Member

since 2003-03-16

Posts 34
montana

1 posted 2003-04-13 08:21 PM

I personally really really enjoyed it.

Kristin

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