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A poetic mind

chopsticks
Senior Member

since 2007-10-02

Posts 888
The US,

0 posted 2009-03-07 09:04 AM

I wish I had a sounding board ,
That would hook right up with me.
Someone with a poetic mind ,
To take a look , see what they see .

Do I often use mixed meter .
Yes, darn it I certainly do .
I don’t regret that I do it .
I’ve heard that it is all right to .

Do I ever use bad grammar ,
Like using to instead of too .
Maybe some day I’ll get better ;
But that time is way over due .

Do I ever miss spell a word
That is cutting  me to the deep
Well yes I do, some of the time,
But  I  try to never loose sleep

Do I use a lot of clichés.
That, you can bet your boots I will.
Now I have to get a move on.
I am late for work at the mill .

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

1 posted 2009-03-07 09:10 AM

I see what you did there...and I love it!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

turtle
Senior Member

since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

2 posted 2009-03-07 01:56 PM

Hi chops,

It looks like your structured verse is improving. It also looks like you're getting help. That's good.

chopsticks
Senior Member

since 2007-10-02

Posts 888
The US,

3 posted 2009-03-07 06:12 PM

Thank you Susan. It doesn’t get any better than ~ I love it ~

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