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Critical Analysis #2

Who Is Caught

turtle
Senior Member

since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

0 posted 2009-03-02 05:04 PM

Who Is Caught? (metaphor)

The old man fixed his fetid bait
To rusty brown hook's spindle base,
As scorching sun marked lulling gait
Of dory's fate in God's embrace.

His callused hands dropped weighted line,
He watched it slip down through the sea,
Then looked to sky in hopes divine,
With sad eyes casting prayer to Thee.

He gave his lot to thoughts sublime
Of steely days when he was young,
As whimsy drifted back in time
To slackened bitter aching tongue.

Scant dory lurched to battle wrought,
The line burned deep into his flesh.
He smiled and mused, "Now who is caught?"
As man and fish began to thrash.

turtle

nina1522
Member

since 2009-02-14

Posts 189

1 posted 2009-03-03 06:39 PM

wow this is great!!! im so glad your teaching me, dang your good.

turtle
Senior Member

since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

2 posted 2009-03-03 06:45 PM

HaHaHa!

Thanks nina, I'm happy to see you reading and commenting on other's poems.

psssst

It's one of the best ways to learn how to write poetry.

pontyjim
Junior Member

since 2009-03-06

Posts 40
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2009-03-06 07:24 PM

Very nice Turtle. Already you are becoming a favorite read! I really enjoy the way you paint such detailed, rich images inside fairly concise lines. Masterful.

turtle
Senior Member

since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

4 posted 2009-03-07 03:42 PM

Thanks Jim,

But do you understand it?

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