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illuminated truth
Junior Member

since 2009-02-16

Posts 20

0 posted 2009-02-16 11:21 PM

I started it late one morning, haven't finished it yet but would like to know how it is so far.

What was I to do?

Life as I knew it was completely through.

My eyes filled with tears, my heart with sorrow.

I was in such despair, I had gave up all hopes for a tomorrow.

You see, I was a lost soul

With not one dream, aspiration, or goal

I was flying in the sky

My feet were on the ground, yet life was steady passing me by

No one understood me

They felt my mind was void & empty

But that wasn’t right.

Because if they had searched hard enough then they would’ve seen a light.

turtle
Senior Member

since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

1 posted 2009-02-17 12:17 PM

Hi illumihnated truth,

I'm quoting you here IT:
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
"You see, I was a lost soul
With not one dream, aspiration, or goal"
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

To show you that this is how to write poetry....

Here, you tell me who you are, then describe to me what that means.

chopsticks
Senior Member

since 2007-10-02

Posts 888
The US,

2 posted 2009-02-17 08:48 AM

You tell me who you are, then describe to me what that means.”

"You see, I was a lost soul
With not one dream, aspiration, or goal"

Turtle, the poet told you who he are : “I” “ The first person singular “ was a lost soul.

Turtle, the poet told you what that means : He’s in the dumps, “ With not one dream,

aspiration, or goal "

Some of the poets come here for help, not to be confused .

turtle
Senior Member

since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

3 posted 2009-02-17 05:59 PM

chops, you and I are saying the same thing???

chopsticks
Senior Member

since 2007-10-02

Posts 888
The US,

4 posted 2009-02-17 06:06 PM

OK, if you say so.

turtle
Senior Member

since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

5 posted 2009-02-17 07:47 PM

Thanks for explaining it for me chops.
I was turning my eggs. IT, what he said

chopsticks
Senior Member

since 2007-10-02

Posts 888
The US,

6 posted 2009-02-18 05:50 AM

Turtle, you are welcome. I don’t know what happen , but IT got it coming and going.

We are kind of like part of that four man work gang back in the REAL depression:

~~One a coming, one a going , one a resting, and one a hoeing ~~

Btw, you may be eating way too many eggs .

[This message has been edited by chopsticks (02-18-2009 10:29 AM).]

turtle
Senior Member

since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

7 posted 2009-02-18 11:07 AM

pssst

I'm not sure we can use that sort of language here....

hoeing?

I don't thing I want to know how you made a living back then

chopsticks
Senior Member

since 2007-10-02

Posts 888
The US,

8 posted 2009-02-18 12:44 PM

Turtle, I only did hoeing for a hobby.

I love your form letters.

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