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Celestial Waltz
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Celestial Waltz |
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Freely_expressing Member
since 2008-10-16
Posts 69NSW, Australia |
I walk unheard through realmless glades As willows sway their eerie dance; Wood, not flesh, on second glance My breaths like awkward rusty blades Tear jagged wounds in untouched air That whispers in and out my hair I sit and lean on mossy bark Finding peace in the soft caress Awareness fades with days’ brightness… Secure in my blanket dark I dream of days now been and done When man and nature lived as one My soul soars free of its confines To join the concert of the night Under Taurus shining bright High among the towering pines Moonlight flows like molten silver The forest creatures softly quiver Whirling high among the stars I wonder at their birth, their death Who gave these fiery beings breath? I dance on, past radiant Mars He turns to watch as I step by A twinkle in one fearsome eye The ending comes, the finale A comet on a distant shore The curtain falls, to rise no more To earth again, mortality Not all is lost, for I am found Alive in ways far more profound Throughout my hidden solitude Warmth returns to dark hollows As through the trees kind sunlight flows A possum trails by with her brood To sleep away the daylight hours My nostrils fill; cool scent of flowers I rise now to pursue my quest Go further on, go further in Soft leaves brush against my skin I go north, south, east and west But still I wander aimlessly Fooled by the winds that carry me I’ve been where I cannot describe Where heaven intersects the earth Where each day gives new wonders birth Thoughts of things my mind won’t hide Flood back with melancholic tones I long to leave more than dry bones But still my feet do not ascend As high as on that glorious night When I was one with heaven’s light Yet now I can comprehend The reason for their brilliant fire These souls in heavenly attire Placed there by a Makers hand They glorify eternally Testaments for you and me So how can we not understand? How can we claim to not have known? The might creation’s clearly shown |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
“ I dream of days now been and done “ Hi Freely, from what I know about poetry you did a good job, not perfect but ok. I particular like the above line best. I have never heard that expression before . |
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