Critical Analysis #2 |
Innocent Nights & Fiery Fugitives |
Taylor See Member
since 2008-10-07
Posts 55North Carolina, US |
Hello, sort of new to posting here. Just found these forums so still browsing around. I'm 16 so my poems vary from good to bad. Please let me know what you honestly think, and thanks for reading! Innocent Nights & Fiery Fugitives In innocence they enter Cross the crumbled and cracked creation Boundaries born, blockades for breaking Slide into the silver-scape that stretches on And know the night is not nearly gone Time ticks trimly, tocking, talking the truth Sun slips silently across this slumbering, star-strewn space Gasping at the greener grass as the gentle grasp of morning grows Watching as warm waves of light weave with widespread sky Always amazed, an awe of living, an answerless asking of why Fire flares across the fringe of the fields, a few final free moments Two melted mouths make merry mischief Bare bodies bend and break apart, bid the burning bond abate Farewelling, the fugitives flee the field To meet once more by the merciful moonlight Of a new night not knowing of the innocence ending On furtive feet they go And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall They forget that they can move themselves, in the greatest game of all |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
“ I'm 16 so my poems vary from good to bad ” I can see that Taylor, but I bet you’ll knock our socks off by the time you’re 18 . Btw, that does bring up a bone of contention with me , is it actually possible to be 16. |
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