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When thrown from own plane!
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dwgpoet Member
since 2007-03-05
Posts 122FL, USA |
How cool !!! Hang gliding wingless, when entrepreneurship over "MINE" own Sign: "Property of TR Dunn," = NO TRESPASSIN Condos like pebbles Below Mountain wilderness' trees. They sing thikx green, them networking trunks, say, "U R Over the HILL, went up the green to B King of the ... was pushed off the job, by U FELL OFF the name sign; Patting his bald head, ... Maledictions said, "Wait till the clock strikes. Your brick puddles high tide surge implodes cities' trash. We are all stardust, exploding super- novas. Meanwhile an eagle nebula awakes next door. Galaxy is forming new life's ... Juxtaposition. GET OUT OF THERE or IT will BLOW you all AWAY!. Fire me, will you? copyright dwgpoet 2007 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm afraid I didn't understand this one at all. I couldn't find any connections, but this, I did like this part-- "We are all stardust, exploding super- novas. Meanwhile an eagle nebula awakes next door. Galaxy is forming new life's ... Juxtaposition." That part, isolated, is very visual and has movement and excitement. |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Dear Dwgpoet, When I was a kid one of the first books of poetry I bought was by Robert Sward. I enclose a link to it here and commend to you the title poem, "Uncle Dog, The Poet at Nine," as being a small and worthy gem, and one that may have some small and special meaningfulness to you. What with being related and all, you know. I am certain I must have Giant Schnauser blood myself someplace in the past. I wouldn't have figured you for an Asta, though; more like an Uncle Dog type. Let me know. My best, Bob K. I think I also had a Josef K as a relative way back there somewhere on the bouncing Czech side of the family, now that I think about it. Family; it's a helluva thing isn't it? |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Dear Dwgpoet, When I was a kid one of the first books of poetry I bought was by Robert Sward. I enclose a link to it here and commend to you the title poem, "Uncle Dog, The Poet at Nine," as being a small and worthy gem, and one that may have some small and special meaningfulness to you. What with being related and all, you know. I am certain I must have Giant Schnauser blood myself someplace in the past. I wouldn't have figured you for an Asta, though; more like an Uncle Dog type. Let me know. My best, Bob K. I think I also had a Josef K as a relative way back there somewhere on the bouncing Czech side of the family, now that I think about it. Family; it's a helluva thing isn't it? Also, I think, Serenity Blaze has a good point about the clarity of the sections she mentions. |
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dwgpoet Member
since 2007-03-05
Posts 122FL, USA |
Mr. Bob and Ms. Serenity Blaze, You both have a keen sense of telescopic imagery, that 99% of the world has never investigated as being out there. Thank you both for my need for clarity. I thought the images of a bald headed TR Dunn thrown from a plane, and then viewing thikx green around condos around trash, after being fired from a corporation that he had created, by a new King of the .. Well, I better revise. Also Bob, THANX for the encouragement to research Robert Sward's "Uncle Dog" poems. I was a garbageman for 13 years. dwgpoet. copyright dwgpoet 2007 |
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SkaaDee Member
since 2008-04-07
Posts 116Canada |
I enjoyed the manic feel, the robust use of language and the obtuse nature which draws me in and demands further readings. upon further exploration I sahll leave any coments that may help you toward your ends, once those ends have been fully understood |
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dwgpoet Member
since 2007-03-05
Posts 122FL, USA |
Hi SkaaDee, I am happy that you've enjoyed the manic robust and obtuse. As said, I will revise. I will wait a while; however, to receive a few suggestions on how lines can be reworded. asta. |
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dwgpoet Member
since 2007-03-05
Posts 122FL, USA |
Hey mon, Scotty D MP3 Your jazzy business network page rhymes. coool |
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SkaaDee Member
since 2008-04-07
Posts 116Canada |
How cool !!! Hang gliding wingless, when entrepreneurship over "MINE" own Sign: "Property of TR Dunn," = NO TRESPASSIN (is the G left off of TRESPASSING intentionally ? it matters because it draws attention.) Condos like pebbles Below Mountain wilderness' (the capital B on 'Below' seems to disconnect it from the sentence. was this intentional ? or is Below Mountain a proper name of something ?) trees. They sing thikx green, (interesting use of a word) them networking trunks, (an allusion to bosses and managers ?) say, "U R Over the HILL, (where does the quote end ?) went up the green to B King of the ... was pushed off the job, by U FELL OFF the name sign; Patting his bald head, ... Maledictions said, "Wait till the clock strikes. Your brick puddles high tide surge implodes cities' trash. We are all stardust, exploding super- novas. Meanwhile an eagle nebula awakes next door. Galaxy is forming new life's ... Juxtaposition. GET OUT OF THERE or IT will BLOW you all AWAY!. Fire me, will you? (it sounds to me that this poem is about someone who lost his job and jumps out of an airplane. not sure about the rest. ) |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Nah!, Actual news story about a guy flying an ultralight. Dwgpoet reads reality with the eye of an artist. Sometimes things that you accept as normal and everyday reality will stand up and take a bow as the actual mind benders they are. I knew a woman who was shopping in a midwestern supermarket chain (Eagle Foods) and she looked down and got a poem. She tinkered a bit and I think published it someplace, a lovely piece titled, if I remember correctly," Eagle Salt." Who'd known that about eagles before? |
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SkaaDee Member
since 2008-04-07
Posts 116Canada |
thanks dwgpoet about my music page. |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear dwgpoet, I dig the out of this world lines. BJ |
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dwgpoet Member
since 2007-03-05
Posts 122FL, USA |
Your Welcome SkaaDee. Thanks BROTHER JOHN for the "out of this SAM World" comment. My friends just call me crazy, as they burst out loud in his_terics. |
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