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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
In a moral dilemma when your left looks right and up brings you down imagine what Jesus would do. Then do the opposite in the same cool beard. you’ll lose followers, gain a few flowers but be way out in front. |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
Dear Grinch, I like this one and it has profound meanings. But what is the style? A free verse? yes, a free verse.  I read several times and I love those expression when your left looks right and up brings you down beautiful. I'll write more later |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
Grinch, I like your poem, I would drop imagine. When I read line 8 my mind plays a trick on me and I read flowers as followers. I wonder does any body else ? I am not saying it’s wrong. |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Chops, happens to me too, especially if you read it 2 or 3 times on the run.again,I am not saying it is wrong or intend it as criticism. If anything, it makes you re read it & think about the words/phrases meaning etc, so on that basis, it's all good to me....! John |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
Thanks John, I thought it was just me until I read your post and that inspired me to check it out some: “ Aoccdrnig to rscheearch at Cmabrigde Uinervtisy, it deosn't mttaer in waht oredr the ltteers in a wrod are, the olny iprmoetnt tihng is taht the frist and lsat ltteer be at the rghit pclae “ |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
Grinch, let me explain how I found out my mind was tricking me : I was going to suggest that you make lines 7 and 8 diametrical with some thing like this: You'll lose followers You'll gain followers That is when I realized the word was "flowers" I didn't see it when I read the poem , only when I typed it out. [This message has been edited by chopsticks (02-09-2008 11:49 AM).] |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
quote: ? |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
Poet Grinch is an Atheist. So when he talked about moral dilemma together with "What Jesus would do." he was in a mood of criticizing the hypocrisy of certain Christians or certain things. He was kind of judging that the subject not only lose followers but after death, there would be no rewards...The flowers are way out in front...not even belong the tomb. This is how I understand this poem. Poet Grinch? |
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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
Then again it could just be a backward glance or criticism of the hippie revolution. |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
Ouch, was I suckered again. I saw the poem as someone trying to solve a problem using Kentucky windage and not logic. I guess it was the use of the phrase “Cool beard “ However, I like the backward glance scenario the best. |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Grinch: quote: That's pretty much what I got from it, but I didn't see it so firmly rooted in the past. "WWJD" has always sounded like such a terribly presumptuous phrase to me, but fortunately the fad seems to have passed (for now). But I read this as a criticism of any deceptively easy formula purported to solve moral dilemmas, and you picked an easy formula for your readers to recognize - then turned it on its ear. I think you did a fine job on the poem. My only nit is with the final three lines. I couldn't decide whether the concise ending worked better for me than a more developed ending would. "Lost followers" I get (pulling an anti-WWJD would probably cause just that) and I get the flowers, but I'm not sure I see how this gets the trend-bucker ahead. Unless that is the point. Anyway, liked the poem, Grinch. Thanks for the posting. Jim |
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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
Jim, quote: It doesn’t it gets him “way out” with some “front”. |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
quote: Been thinking of this on and off for the past week. Do you mean like a "Symbionese Liberation Front"? Jim |
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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
Jim, An outward, often feigned, appearance or manner: To put up a good front. Way out man. |
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