Critical Analysis #2 |
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A pair of feet |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india ![]() |
A pair of feet Just now this ancient walkway Carried those light feet away Not knowing who she was, You know, sadness can open Some abrupt tiers, sub conscious. It can open your heart, beside The yellow growth of satanic nicotine. A pair of petering feet can open many dreams (Mother for a last time saying “don’t go!”) Or (A casual afire tastes sad in an after taught) The cold stone of the walkway don’t know Nightmares, it is born under a cold star. |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
Poddarku , I think I understand your poem , but I want to call on the Translator. OK Tomster, you have thirty seconds and your time starts now . What television show was I watching this cold snowy morning ? |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
This is a very beautiful free verse. I don't think that it needs to change a thing. Chops, I saw you staring at the mirror all morning. I can't say that it was not a show. ![]() Tomtoo |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
“ This is a very beautiful free verse.” I agree and I think the poem is about mother and the loss of her daughter, but was it by death or some other reason. L 8 is confusing for me, “ Satanic nicotine “ makes me think bad things. |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india |
thank u both tom and chop.here ancient corridor means passage of time. |
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