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Critical Analysis #2

Another two liner

chopsticks
Senior Member

since 2007-10-02

Posts 888
The US,

0 posted 2008-01-11 12:04 PM

Water is nature’s solvent, East, West, North and South.
Do yourself a favor go wash out your mouth .

Brad
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since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

1 posted 2008-01-11 04:17 PM

I like that play on nature/mature. It kind of screws up the rhythm but, hey, that still works, doesn't it?

I'm promptly off to wash my mouth with a nice, warm glass of caffeinated, brown, dark brown, expresso brown, water.

I just woke up!

TomMark
Member Elite

since 2007-07-27

Posts 2133
LA,CA

2 posted 2008-01-11 04:38 PM

Both TUI (talking under influence)

oceanvu2
Senior Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 1066
Santa Monica, California, USA

3 posted 2008-01-11 04:45 PM

I think there needs to be some sort of punctuation between "favor" and "go."

Here's a paste from:

(Ah, just kidding!)

Best, Jim Aitken

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