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Shake Junior Member
since 2006-11-17
Posts 40 |
This poem was inspired by the phrase "Forgive and let live."It's more of a ballad than a poem. Forgiven 'Twas a dark summer's night, When I beheld a great fright, In a town of 1000 or so. With all of my might, I held in my fright, In this town of 1000 or so. I scarce could believe, This terrible dream, That beset me in this late hour. Still I laid down my head, And nothing was said, Resting in this late hour. The clock struck three, I let out a scream, Early a summer's morn. The monster appeared, To confirm my worst fears, Early a summer's morn. He was twisted and gruesome; Decietful and loathesome. He wore the faces of those I hate. He glared at me hungering, I gazed at him wondering, Why he wore those faces I hate. It shrieked,"Behold I am hate! And death is your fate!" He smiled and licked his lips. And Hate did devour, Me is this hour, And belched as he licked his lips. I awoke with a yell, "A dream?" All was well. 'twas merely a nightly horror. I arose from my bed, To see my corpse,dead! I screamed in shock and horror. I pointed at I, "Why would I die?" I mumbled under my breath, I asked myself,"How?" I began to scowl, And mumbled under my breath: "'Twas a dark summer's night, When I beheld a great fright, In a town of 1000 or so. Through all of my hate, I met a grim fate, Now I haunt this town of 1000 or so." Feedback appreciated! "When the rich wage war,it's the poor that die."-- |
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rockbabe Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 105 |
Nicely written. I personally do not believe that each line should rhyme when writing poetry. But this one I surely did enjoy. V |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Why should not each line rhyme? |
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