A New World’s: Courtroom Language

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dwgpoet
Member

since 2007-03-05

Posts 122
FL, USA

0 posted 2007-04-28 01:27 AM

“O Say Can You See,” Our Dictionary
Our constitutional courtroom
We tirelessly research
Research all precedence records
We isolate the greed, then comb
Then comb straight all crooked testimony

Never needs a bailiff
No thugs threaten. “All rise” No
Stocking caps clown rehearse
No Loopholes to bequest. No
Ostracism or outbursts
No dramatized evidence No
Compromised Court procedures
No hung juries ever mitigate
No counsel ever adjourns over night
All verdicts embrace unanimous
Decisions of zero jail time
They read out the sentence with
No slander or superstition
No horseshoes, or mistletoe
No nine lives black cat
No domestics to dispute
No mothers back on the pipe crack
Infinite silver placemats tableware set out neat to heal. ONE Order on his Seat
An Immortal White ROBE, a slain Lawyer resurrected, Counselor of Creation
He plants defogged cool Shade
Shades from his most majestic mountain
Inhale the Robe's fresh oxygen
The Lamb lops off old chains
We swim from under death’s yank
Proclaim the motion globally heard
Court steps to doorways, all spread
Harmonize shoulder-to-shoulder
Our constitution calms waves of the very sea VICTORY A Court’s final Decrees

copyright dwgpoet 2007

carter07
Junior Member

since 2007-04-26

Posts 31

1 posted 2007-04-28 10:52 PM

I give it a 5. The beginning is a bit confusing. You've got great use of legal jargon but it doesn't seem to have a point.
"Infinite silver placemats tableware set out neat to heal. ONE Order on his Seat
An Immortal White ROBE, a slain Lawyer resurrected, Counselor of Creation
He plants defogged cool Shade
Shades from his most majestic mountain"
This piece tied it all together for me. Its about God? correct me if I'm wrong. Your use of legal jargon in conjunction with the real world (new world) is absolute genius. I'm a bit confused by the ending as well. But overrall, I really liked this! Can't wait to see more

dwgpoet
Member

since 2007-03-05

Posts 122
FL, USA

2 posted 2007-04-29 02:46 AM

Thanks Carter07,
you 007'd the jist of this True New
World Order poem.
More of "the WORD hits SAMs Chickens"
are on the way soon.

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