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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
A twelve line poem for the Viking, who asked for one. REAR ENDED I moved to Phoenix to make money And escape my wintry past. Turned out I had colon cancer And I lost my ass. This was thirty years ago. My ass has not returned. But, given the alternative, I don’t think I was burned. My care was free, I shouldn’t knock it. No one's hands were in my pocket. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Absolutely charming. I'd tell you to fix that past-ass rhyme, but I like it too much the way it is. Excellent work, my fair home dawg. Valedictions, -Paul |
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dwgpoet Member
since 2007-03-05
Posts 122FL, USA |
Assless in Pheonix? Is this real? No Ass? No Bull? On a 7 scale, I rate this a full 6.99999. only repetition seen in one line. Clarity rating also a 7. It's simplistic, but sublime. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
I like it. Simple, funny , witty. Good |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Yeah, it's real, but that shouldn't matter. On the other hand, thirty years passed before I wrote this little verse, so, apparently, a full on-AP resection and irreversible colostomy may have an effect on the psyche. Jim |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Haha! Funny guy that Jimbo. -Paul |
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