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Andrew Dickinson
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since 2006-07-26
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0 posted 2006-07-28 03:38 AM





Upon a river of old
told for righteous gold;
precious is the party,
many who are the many
what conformist sold,
never to know the Sea.

© Copyright 2006 Andrew Dickinson - All Rights Reserved
merlynh
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since 1999-09-26
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deer park, wa
1 posted 2006-07-29 06:44 PM


I must say you said a lot in few words.  Though many may view themselves as an island, not everyone realizes water touches all shores.  Whether it’s a sea or a dream; it’s merely what it seems to be.
artexeres
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since 2006-08-01
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south africa
2 posted 2006-08-01 10:04 AM


the face of truth remains hidden behind a circle of gold, a very short and powerfill piece
Beau de L'air
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since 2006-08-03
Posts 105
Middlesex, England
3 posted 2006-08-05 02:34 PM


The good poem has a little snaggy bit.

"many who are the many" is very good
"WHAT conformist sold" isn't unless you put a question mark at the end of the line.  But conformist is such a sophomoric word, really, isn't it?
Well at least it's a good poem, whatever it's about, which isn't clear, obviously.....

Essorant
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4 posted 2006-08-05 05:07 PM


"...whatever it's about..."


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