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Critical Analysis #2

Beyond The Sea

Andrew Dickinson
New Member

since 2006-07-26

Posts 8

0 posted 2006-07-28 03:38 AM

Upon a river of old
told for righteous gold;
precious is the party,
many who are the many
what conformist sold,
never to know the Sea.

merlynh
Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 411
deer park, wa

1 posted 2006-07-29 06:44 PM

I must say you said a lot in few words. Though many may view themselves as an island, not everyone realizes water touches all shores. Whether it’s a sea or a dream; it’s merely what it seems to be.

artexeres
Member

since 2006-08-01

Posts 156
south africa

2 posted 2006-08-01 10:04 AM

the face of truth remains hidden behind a circle of gold, a very short and powerfill piece

Beau de L'air
Member

since 2006-08-03

Posts 105
Middlesex, England

3 posted 2006-08-05 02:34 PM

The good poem has a little snaggy bit.

"many who are the many" is very good
"WHAT conformist sold" isn't unless you put a question mark at the end of the line. But conformist is such a sophomoric word, really, isn't it?
Well at least it's a good poem, whatever it's about, which isn't clear, obviously.....

Essorant
Member Elite

since 2002-08-10

Posts 4769
Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada

4 posted 2006-08-05 05:07 PM

"...whatever it's about..."

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