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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513
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Speak up. Let the words Roll off your tounge Protest the things You think are wrong Argue, Debate Don’t hang fire The moment will Soon expire And leave you with Your complaints Speak up. The microphone waits. [This message has been edited by pen&paper (06-06-2006 04:14 PM).] |
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Skippyrick Member
since 2006-05-16
Posts 150Rohnert Park |
hi: Short Some of the lines don't seem to fit well. the one about fire seem alittle out of place, no follow throuth. need some work Rick |
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loveislove Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 59USA |
i think its relatively good but some of the lines dont seem to fit together but i do like the meaning of it... standing up for what u believe in and stuff like that...yeah...groovy The more people that I can make EXTREMELY uncomfortable, the better |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
to "hang fire" means gto procratinate;to put something off. |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
I like it, the message is clear . I am not real crazy about the last line . Before I print it out for my icebox I will change it to , “ The time is now “ I don’t believe (complaints and waits) are a rhyme anyhow , so none of the rhythm is lost . |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
You tell somebody to speak up, but you never explain why. |
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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
Just one suggestion. The microphone waits. The microphone awaits. |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
Brad, he was telling us to “ Protest the things you think are wrong “ not that you or I needed him to tell us that. |
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