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Archea Member
since 2006-05-13
Posts 65United States |
Summer rain, Like warm tears heating my face light up the world for my eyes. i see the dew, smell the water all around such a wonderful fragrance. I fly to the clouds they cover me up in moist, warm tears As i watch the sunset drif into twilight stars, and singing angels carry me home in my sleep. |
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Skippyrick Member
since 2006-05-16
Posts 150Rohnert Park |
Hi: Nature is always a good subject for a poem. I like your words but some of the syntax seemed wrong to me. Thank for sharing rick Summer rain, Like warm tears warm my face light up the world in my eyes. I see dew, smell the water all around such a wonderful fragrance. I fly to the clouds they cover me up in moist, tears As i watch the sunset drif into twilight stars, I sing with angels that carry me home in my dreams. |
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