Critical Analysis #2 |
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Devil On Your Shoulder |
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Atticus New Member
since 2005-11-10
Posts 6 |
An ego begins to pronounce, thriving in its own exuberance. Gifted hands kissed by darkness, makeshift lips mask the miles of fire. Hell's become it's own master. Giggling as it lashes itself for motivation. For every smoldering tear to break silence with the sizzle of hate, a serpentine tongue erases existence. Licking its wounds not to ease the pain, but to let the salts of a cavernous bare trap drip into the slit of man kinds comfort. Hell itself now has its boundaries; the human body holds timid leeway. Nonetheless Hell still sits in love. [edit by moderator] with malice, and prodding a volcanic orifice. But... Hell wastes no time in search for corruption. Eye's singe the theory of evil's extension. With its goal the world; the torch has been lit. Hell sets its path a blaze. Shaking already burnt hands; the grinning idiot cares not of its selfish and sadistic hypocrisy. Smiles for the camera *Flash* yet somehow you've missed the shot. The cameras batteries explode; more skeptical of your leader than you. Corners of his mouth erratic. His grin; tickling satanic whispers of judgments into his own cropped ears. You think he loves you, [edit by moderator]. Now he sits comfortable seated upon the pinnacle of your everything. You have elected this evil. Allotted him his own mountain with a magnifine glass for each hand. He gazes now at his bubbling mirror, in awe of self until the image melts to nothing. Hell giggles, swimming in its own vanity. Now they are his, they owe to him everything. Now Tanned by his fiery tyranny, Satan has accomplished one goal. Now striving to raise, and Dam along the embers of the pseudonym... Sadam. |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Welcome to CA. Please check your email. Pete |
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Atticus New Member
since 2005-11-10
Posts 6 |
*Scratches Head* Nothing In There Man. |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Take a look at it now and I think you will understand. |
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Atticus New Member
since 2005-11-10
Posts 6 |
?, Why Did You Edit Out Line Fragments ... It Was Already 'Stared' Out. And I Cant Get To The Adult Forum To Post ... So Its Not Like I Can Post 'Profanity' Properly. |
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Atticus New Member
since 2005-11-10
Posts 6 |
Mmm, And I See You Deleted My Other Poem; Real Nice Site... Never Seen Poetry Site Embrace Censorship So Avidly. *Shakes Head* |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
quote: From the Guidelines : "Misspelling a word, using asterisks to mask some or all letters, acronyms or abbreviations, or ANY other attempt to disguise profanity doesn't make it any less profane. If we can discern your meaning from your content, you obviously didn't disguise it enough." The first sentence of that is even highlighted so you would more easily recognize its importance. You clearly didn't read the Guidelines, and you apparently don't have a reliable email address either (I sent an email, after the Moderator here did, when your other poem was pulled), both of which are requirements for Membership. I am therefore disabling your account. Feel free, if you wish, to Register again, this time with a more reliable email address and only after you've read the Guidelines much more closely. |
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