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sunsetgun Junior Member
since 2005-07-17
Posts 21 |
Dusk comes riding in on a frigid wind, the clouds racing by erasing Night's sky , lightning strikeing down as thunder claps sound , bright lights flash that make shadows contrast , rain drops like gunshots hammering rooftops time suddenly stops. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
There's a mix of feet, which is initial stresses. quote: quote: quote: Also, the meter varies from trimeter in the beginning to tetrameter towards the end. To learn more about stresses, meter and many other things, check out this glossary. Then there's the issue of spelling and punctuation. strikeing should be striking and thunderclap instead of thunder clap. In a line including a comma, the space comes after, not before the comma. The bulk of the poem aptly describes a storm, but I don't quite understand how the last line ties into the rest of the work. Could you clarify? By the by, welcome to Passions!  I hope my critique wasn't too harsh. |
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sunsetgun Junior Member
since 2005-07-17
Posts 21 |
no problem..I appreciate your help. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Sure thing. Might want to check out this page, which is a great place for information. I use it extensively, as Ron has consolidated many excellent resources into one place. |
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sunsetgun Junior Member
since 2005-07-17
Posts 21 |
To clarify, I'm having trouble finding an ending |
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sunsetgun Junior Member
since 2005-07-17
Posts 21 |
thanks , these are great resources. I begin to understand the concept of meter. |
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