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Ignorance |
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Yogi Member
since 2001-11-05
Posts 68 |
God Made Us All Equal Each And Every Person The Same Inside Outside The Same, Just different Skin Types So Why Do People Hate A Repulsion For A Fellow Man The Ignorance People Show Is Intolerable All Just For One Small difference Skin Tone God Made Religion So We Can Pray To Him So Why Do People Fight Over His Making Each Saying And Praying To Their different God Blood Shed, Families Feuding, Wars Fought When We All Know There's Only One What We Need Is A Peaceful Earth Where Man Of different Skin And Religion Putting Hands Together, With Hate No More For Our Earth Is Dying Tears Of Blood, She Sheds Into Oceans Breaking Her Heart, Shakes As Earthquakes Lets Mend Our Earth Treat Her With Respect No More Divide |
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brilliantlover New Member
since 2005-06-25
Posts 5Maryland |
An honorable idea for your poem, but not conveyed in the strongest language. The capitalization of each word makes the sound of the poem very stiff. I know there is emotion in this poem, but I cannot hear it because of the structure. Take a look again: God Made Us All Equal Each And Every Person The Same Inside Outside The Same, Just different Skin Types So Why Do People Hate A Repulsion For A Fellow Man The Ignorance People Show Is Intolerable All Just For One Small difference Skin Tone It's monotonous. Word choice comes off as somewhere in between cliche and naive. "Ignorance," "Hate," and "Repulsion" are strong words in the dictionary, but in real life, they barely scratch the surface of the bloodshed in people's struggle to be free. |
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Angel1 Junior Member
since 2005-06-29
Posts 20TN, USA |
Noble, and to the point. I like it. |
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