Critical Analysis #2 |
Like an English Summer Rain |
Italy Angel Member
since 2003-09-01
Posts 65Northern Ca |
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netsky Member
since 2005-03-29
Posts 148Miami |
an early reply: this is a splendid poem of depth and insight. deliciously sad. by poems such as this I learn. beautiful. I'll revisit this poem often. no critcism, but acknowlegment of you grace. |
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Italy Angel Member
since 2003-09-01
Posts 65Northern Ca |
Grazie! I appreciate it. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I cannot critique well, but I can say that there is much depth in this, and it amazed me. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I know this is the critque forum, however at the moment all I would like to say is: this is good really good. thanks for sharing it. J There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Wow, that is one of the best poems I have read. I love the voice in the poem. I love your pausing and flow. Wow. That really shocked me. It was cohesive and elegant. I lved it this one is a keeper. -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The only thing I can critique about this writing, is myself, for not seeing it when it was first posted. An excellent example of thought, imagery, and brevity. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
I think this would be much better if “we” were everywhere instead of “they”, ( the latter to me having a certain pompous distance to it) |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I loved reading this out loud, and again not a critque person but I did send it to someone who sure is, and perhaps he will give you the critique you are looking for. I especially loved this, and the way that you make the reader stop and take notice . They learn to get bywhen july deepens on fastbreath or uncertain hands. Off I go to read more of your very enjoyable poetry. I too loved the depth to this and the honesty of subject. |
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cynicsRus Senior Member
since 2003-06-06
Posts 591So Cal So Cool! |
Italy Angel, I take it, you posted your piece here, for honest, if not harsh critique, as opposed to the patronizing comments in many "non-critique forums?" Sorry to disappoint you. I found this an extremely captivating read. It's clear, you could teach me a few things about writing. Thank you for posting. Sid If you must carp: Carpe diem! ICSoria My poetry forum. |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
A deliciously captivating read! You are a poet who keenly expresses the manner of imagery in poetry. I'll look forward to more of this! warmhrt "It is wisdom to know others; |
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