NEFARIOUS! (acted out in brief)

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netsky
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since 2005-03-29

Posts 148
Miami

0 posted 2005-04-06 05:45 PM

contextual definition via whimsical humor

            I   criminal act
                machine gun: ack! ack!

           II   henchmen near essential
                to carry crime's tools

          III   acts in best minimum
                to set the end stage

                Impulse plus Modus
                lead to
                1 ruined day

                2n as in algebra
                multiplied by

                1x as for victim
                effect by affect an

                unrighteous dictum:
                Nefarious Result
                (details occult)

      curtains on all such vile criminality!
    (rhyming here being the chief seminality)

[This message has been edited by netsky (04-07-2005 03:57 AM).]

longte
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since 2005-04-06

Posts 199
Australia

1 posted 2005-04-07 12:39 PM

Different
Made me read it a few times to pick all the nuances in there

netsky
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since 2005-03-29

Posts 148
Miami

2 posted 2005-04-07 03:56 AM

thank you, longte.  It's just my strange sense to make joke-poems which define various words.

I call them "versawords".  There's another one further down

"antidisestablishmentarianism"

it's more straightforward, believe it or not!

I do humor more than anything else.  And much of that humor is just way-wide from general sensibilities about humor.

thank you,
reid

b.costen
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since 2003-11-02

Posts 107
ontario, CAN

3 posted 2005-04-09 04:20 PM

bluntly, i think this is better than the other stuff i've seen of yours on here so far

it is comedic, but also contains a certain strength to me--in the lines:

"acts in best minimum
to set the end stage"

but on the whole it might be too "compacted" to evoke any sort of anything from me

i liked it best on the first read, but it dies where depth is required to sustain interest as in those timeless poems we so often refer to (unfortunately?) as classics

but that's just bluntly

so what's it going to be then, eh?

netsky
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since 2005-03-29

Posts 148
Miami

4 posted 2005-04-10 01:44 AM

sure, Ben, but do keep in mind that it is a "versaword" as i call my little word-defining or word-play jobs.

"Antidisestablishmentarianism" is another

If you would be so kind as to give me a word, any word, i'll try to make an impromptu humor poem from it. Sometimes it takes but a few minutes.  Other times weeks pass before I get an "angle" to work from.

It's a hobby and sport, these fluffs. I seem to have originated the idea such as it is.

I'll put up another.. you'll see the details change with my mood and sensing of the subject word

Oh,  and the "egrigious" poemlet here is yet another, offering in its examplea contextual definition of that blunt word.

thanks so much for the crit.  All are wanted.

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