»
Archives
»
Critical Analysis #2
»
untitled 2
| Critical Analysis #2 |
|
untitled 2 |
|
|
Roberta Little Junior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 42beloit wi usa |
Untitled By: Me I don't know what to say, I'm not sure what to write, yet I have soo much to get out. I open my mouth to speak but no sound will some out. My pen is poised in my hand, but won't connect with the paper. No words can be written or spoken, to express how I feel. So I send up a little prayer to the one who knows me best and always understands, even if I don't, can't, or won't. GOD's greatist gift is LOVE |
||
| © Copyright 2005 roberta little - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
netsky Member
since 2005-03-29
Posts 148Miami |
much nicer than #1. Here there is a message. Not much of a message, but i get the message and approve of your clean, shorter form in this #2. It's a nice bit of spirituality- recognized by myself, who is not spiritual. But I see this aspect of you, and agree with your expression-form: you have a point to make that evne when there is nothing to say or think, -someone still understands you. You got the import jotted out much better in this poem. thanks, reid |
||
|
Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
I agree with Reid here. This one at least has some substance and direction. Not to say that it really grabs me though. #1 was really nothing more than a rant and not even a very coherent one at that. Rants, though sometimes valid, rarely stand up well to serious criticism. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
