the truth of light lies in the darkness of fates own garden

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the truth of light lies in the darkness of fates own garden

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

0 posted 2002-07-10 08:43 PM

What do you see when you read this poem?

the truth of light lies in the darkness of fates own garden
the garden of fate
watered by tears of silence
tears flourish from the eyes
which stare from the clouds
white from colors deathless breath
dust heaving upon groundless rocks
hiding past with future
laying on the groundless floor
sinking downwards towards the only door
where the light lies beyond
the truth hanging on by golden broken threads
the fate of darkness
brings forth thee to the garden
lock and key
tears of silence make thee's garden whole
what is the garden that you see
where is this place
I'm dreaming of
what is this really of
the truth of light lies in the darkness of fates own garden

The Napkin Writer
Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 70

1 posted 2002-07-12 10:26 AM

"An intuitive form of love, a desire of love, that is created deeper than the will, itself!
In a place, where we may find, a wave of poetry, constantly flowing....."

Originally Yours,
The Napkin Writer

Kirk T Walker
Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 357
Liberty, MO

2 posted 2002-07-12 07:05 PM

Some very interesting images here; however, I had a difficult time extracting meaning from what seemed to be largely a stringing of images concluded with a few questions (perhaps rhetorical) for the reader. Good luck on your revisions.

Also, are we allowed to critique people's pictures? Because I can see up your nose on the close up. Good thing it appears to be clean! Only kidding--but, seriously, fire the photographer.

Disclaimer: The preceding statement is just my opinion.

Star T
Member

since 2002-07-12

Posts 182
Philadelphia, US

3 posted 2002-07-13 01:45 AM

now that is one deeeeep poem.u are a terrific poet.i get the poem but its like it has different dimensions.i'm still trying to figure the whole thing out.u are good.keep it up.

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