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Ponder Beyond... (repost) |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
Feel not…… the wintry breath of an endless night but the lethal chill of a thousand lies, the reckless cruelty of deliberate deceit. See not…… the angelic brilliance of a perfect moon but the ambivalence of a vague vow, the tortured mind of a soul doomed. Hear not…… the melodious strains of a skilful violin but the distant echoes of a starry ballad, the vicious irony of a love song. Understand now…… the eternal brutal beauty of truth, the inexorable evanescence of love, the inconsequential cursory of life. "Who knows what evil lurks in the heart of Man?" [This message has been edited by Verve (08-25-2004 03:15 AM).] |
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hush Senior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 1653Ohio, USA |
Well, talk about the inner pessimist... you're being a bit to obvious. Love isn't always tortured and bad, although sometimes it feels that way.... you'll generally do better with shades of grey than a mood of stark black. Oh, and feel not? hear not? It doesn't work... try using phrasing a little more natural- I mean, it doesn't have to be like everyday speech, but inversions like that smack of arrogance (to me at least...) Hope I've helped. |
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