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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa 
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Searching for who I used to be Wondering where my life will go. I no longer seem to have control over my emotions or my thoughts. Needing desperately to find what I've lost where did it go how did I lose my identity? Believed in by the ones I love only to be betrayed by myself. So hard for me to sit all alone when I need so much to feel whole. Searching for who I am Hoping for a glimpse of my former self. Long ago they said I was their hero now I'm just their dad. I used to be so loving and gentle now nothing exists but anger. Trying to figure out why I feel so ashamed of who I am and what I've become. Wishing I could change everything back to the way it was. Searching for who I need to be Realizing I'm loved by those who matter most.... P. J. Kotrch |
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xkiss_me_hardx Junior Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 13 |
I really like what you wrote here the message came across loud and clear. I got a tingle reading that part about "I used to be their hero, now i'm just dad". So sad but the choice to improve yourself is one of the most noble ones you can make, it's hard to admit your wrong and even harder to effect a change within yourself. My only suggestion is that the beginning was a little lack luster, it seemed a little bland when compared with the rest of the building, try using different words or shortening it a bit. If this is something that personally affects you my thoughts will be with you and i hope you can set things straight, but it seems like your on the right path already |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
Thank you for your comments. I am still struggling to find a better way to express to my children what I'm struggling to say here. P. J. Kotrch |
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