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Teardrops |
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Halcyon Junior Member
since 2003-04-10
Posts 43Arizona, USA |
I see something shining In those pretty eyes of yours, Something that's also forming in mine. After everything we've had and been through, We promised everything would be fine. But nothing really was As it seemed, and what I saw Suddenly became so unclear. Life became such a blur to me Each and every time we came near. Droplets form between Those two eyes of yours, But please don't wipe them away. In all our sadness and sorrows, These feelings are here to stay. Come with me and let The teardrops run together And flow in an endless stream. Our affections will always be remembered Like the end of a forgotten dream. But the tears hold fast to That beautiful face of yours, And cling to a love that never wants to let go. There are just so many things I want to tell you, So much that I want to let you know. I don't want us to part Like this, if we had to go our Separate paths you and I. Because when that happens our tears will fall, The moment we say goodbye. -=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=- Currently working this into a song (already have the melody done, which can be found here), but before going any further I want to make sure there's nothing conflicting about the ideas portrayed, as well as anything else. |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Don't know what to say about the song angle, but why not concentrate on the permanent tear? A lot more exciting imagery, rather than cliched generality, might be produced by that. Or maybe even allusions to glam rock and clowns? |
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