Coffee Please (an anacrostic)

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Coffee Please (an anacrostic)

TwistedKnickers
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since 2004-01-02

Posts 35
Saskatchewan, Canada

0 posted 2004-01-05 10:18 AM

Can't wake up - eyes half closed
Overslept - must have dozed
Five fifteen - heart attack
Fling the night - Off my back
Eggs and toast - have to wait
Every morning running late
Pull my butt - out of bed
Leave my brain - there instead
Enter here - I drive up
Ask the girl - for a cup
Steaming brew - truth be told
Every drop is liquid gold!

After reading Moose's challenge in the workshop, I thought I might give this form a try.

Poetry is the sculpting of words. We ALL start with a lump of clay.

Not A Poet
Member Elite

since 1999-11-03

Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA

1 posted 2004-01-05 10:56 AM

Looks pretty good to me Cat. But I think it is an acrostic. I don't recognize anacrostic

Content is light, appropriate and meaningful. Meter is consistent. Rhymes good and unforced. And primarily, it is an acrostic. In short, it looks like a keeper to me, a good way to start the day

Pete

Never express yourself more clearly than you can think - Niels Bohr

gourdmad
Member

since 2003-12-01

Posts 136
Upper Ohio Valley

2 posted 2004-01-05 11:47 AM

Coffoe-is it addiction?
Love it-or need it?
Every morning-have to have it?
Very sad-hope you shed it
Even tho-you wrote well
Regaled me-with your wakening

TwistedKnickers
Junior Member

since 2004-01-02

Posts 35
Saskatchewan, Canada

3 posted 2004-01-05 12:23 PM

Thanks a bunch - for the read
Helps my work - to succeed
Anacrostic ain't a word
Not to mention - quite absurd
Keys got stuck - great discord!
Slopped some coffee on my board

Cat

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2004-01-05 01:38 PM

Oh goodness, where's Alicat?
He would LOVE this one!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2004-01-05 03:15 PM

All in fun
Done just fine
Only one cream
Roiled in mine
Absolute coffee fun
Bubbling over
Lightly this time
Easy, easy on the rhyme~

What a FUN write~
Love the acrostic humor of you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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