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Notes from genoa
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Notes from genoa |
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risen New Member
since 2003-12-26
Posts 6 |
Written with the images of The anti globilisation protests in genoa, in which a protestor was murdered by a rent a cop. its a strange style, yet hopefully it brings out the pain and emotions within the subject. anyway, hope you enjoy Notes from Genoa one line the separation between the people and the dream a time ahead against the order a self reliance free, no borders a look ahead, yet over shoulders Charge! Spontanious, reaction stench of fear Down with the old down with YOUR new authority a lie the line stretched, not broken a call Death still as a swamp Retreat a battle lost dead one shot a communtity morns the world stunned no lies anymore your sins on film no questions Regroup Movement, amassed, we lie the night will come bigger, faster submit its your turn now we lived repressed its your turn now Charge! |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
I didnt find the form strange at all and I liked it alot...having said that I think the 2 middles stanza's could be cut and make for a much starker picture and a better poem...sometimes its best not to tell the whole story, leave a little mystery, but thats just me. Just one opinion and as such means less than zero, anyway I liked it, well done. Anyway this is how it looks cut, alt title: Your Sins on Film Notes from Genoa; one line the separation between the people and the dream a time ahead against the order a self reliance free, no borders a look ahead, yet over shoulders Charge! Retreat. Regroup. Movement, amassed, we lie the night will come bigger, faster submit its your turn now we lived repressed its your turn now Charge! [This message has been edited by wintertao (12-26-2003 08:33 PM).] |
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risen New Member
since 2003-12-26
Posts 6 |
hmmm, thanks a lot thats interesting, although i would like to find a way of incorperating the thing about the murder into it, cos its kinda integral to what the poem is, but i'l play, and post my results |
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