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galaxy84 Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 18Pa, USA |
I made you my world Loved you endlessly You were my everything in all my thoughts Day and night Dreams of you, me, us together I hoped to spend my life with you The IT happened-- Why I still know not You broke my heart Tore it in two I felt battered, broken, Used Useless without you You stomped my world Crushed my dreams Killed my hopes I'm so hurt I resent you i should hate you But... i can't You were my first love My last love My only love My heartbreak And for the good times The bad times I will remember you In my heart (loving you still, yet so hurt) In my mind (lessons you taught me) Always I'll never forget YOU |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
The first love, I think is the hardest to get over. Good poem! Denise |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Well done.. emotional poem.. well, don't let it get you down.. you can find someone else.. or they can find you.. Well, at least you learnt a few lessons, eh? probably the only line I don't particularly like is "I should hate you".. 'coz that is one of my pet hates..(hehehe) I don't believe that anyone should ever hate anyone/anything.. so it kinda seems a little strange to say that u think you should hate them.. 'coz, I s'pose it isn't entirely their fault that you two just didn't make it.. some things work.. some don't.. good poem.. Lynne |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I haven't been in love yet so I can't empathise with you....however, I do think your poem is very good! I'd have to agree with Lynne about the hate line though! Love and hugs, Lizzie ![]() "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
A true pouring out of your emotions .... I agree with Denise ... first loves are the hardest to let go ... But; you will, eventually .... and with time,you will find a special place in your memory, especially for her ... I still remember , fondly, my first love ..... |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Kinda sad, but nice poem. It may have been your first, but don't say it's your last. I agree with you, my 'last' (until the next one) ended with a lot of resentment, but I still can't hate her. How could you ever hate someone you once loved? ~Gene |
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galaxy84 Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 18Pa, USA |
thank u all for reading my poem but i do have a comment of my own. i say i should hate him for what he did to me. all the pain, and how he used my love for him. he played me for a fool. i don't hate him, i just feel like maybe i should. i will always love him. he was my first. so im not saying that i do hate him. i'm glad u all took time to read it. with luv, galaxy84 |
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galaxy84 Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 18Pa, USA |
thank u all for reading my poem but i do have a comment of my own. i say i should hate him for what he did to me. all the pain, and how he used my love for him. he played me for a fool. i don't hate him, i just feel like maybe i should. i will always love him. he was my first. so im not saying that i do hate him. i'm glad u all took time to read it. with luv, galaxy84 "Comes the blind Fury with th' abhorred shears, And slits the thin-spun life." -Milton |
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Dulcet New Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 4Michagain |
This is a very nice poem... espechly sience I can relate to it very well! |
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