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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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"Go to hell,you bitch" Small boy's face twisted in wrath A shot gun erupts... this is a senyru BTW  ") |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
Passers by recoil. He's now shooting at them all. Many now will fall. Jack |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
hey, that is harsh! ^_^ that poor boy.. his mind corrupted like that.. I'd hate to imagine his background.. any particular reason for writing this one? ^_^ I like it.. well written.. ^_^ Hey, Jack.. that is great!! A rhyming haiku? Is there a difference between haiku and senyru?? Lynne |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thanx,twinsgd for continuing my senyru....your senyru sent a chill down my spine.... dear Yu Lan,thanx for liking this.... If your 17-syllable poem is about nature,then it is a haiku... if your 17-syllable poem is not about nature(eg about love,friendship,dark emotions,material objects),then it is a senyru hope that helps ")why i wrote this??hmmm....this is in response to a recent shooting tragedy in the US....a 6-year old girl(i think her name was Kadya or something similar)was shot down by her classmate! [This message has been edited by kaile (edited 04-19-2000).] |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a very good senyru...sad thing to have happened to such small children, really tragic. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Oooh... Such violence... BTW, I'm impressed with your skill with haikus, senryus and tankas... Now, don't get all light-headed..._,,,^.^,,,_ |
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