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Never Meant To Be Mine(a Tanka)

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2000-04-19 08:01 PM

Phone finally rings~
"Hi,Chris" in my sexy voice
"Hi,Eve.How are you?"
"May i speak to your sister?"
My heart trapped deep in quicksand

i'm sorry but if you can just spare some time,will you pls look at my post "Paradox(an attempt at a Zen haiku"?i'm not too sure about that one and i will appreciate comments,suggestions etc....
thanx in advance

achicade
Member

since 2000-04-02

Posts 66
Marietta, GA USA

1 posted 2000-04-19 11:27 PM

Good one! Maybe the next call will be for YOU!!!

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ESP
Member Elite

since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

2 posted 2000-04-20 08:51 AM

lol...aw Kaile, maybe next time!! This is a very clever tanka, I thoroughly enjoyed it!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie

"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Dennis L. White
Senior Member

since 2000-02-17

Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.

3 posted 2000-04-20 11:32 AM

Kaile,
A clever tanka indeed! Great dialog!
Dennis :^)

Gene
Senior Member

since 2000-01-23

Posts 935
Colorado, USA

4 posted 2000-04-20 08:11 PM

Very clever, kaile.

Here are some other ideas to work on...try writing ones about these Zen conversations:

Hello, is this the party to whom I'm speaking?
No, this is someone else.
---

Hello, who is this please?
Don't you know, you called me!
---

Hello?
Hello, who is this?
I don't know, I don't have Caller ID.
---

Have fun kaile, I'd love to see what you come up with.

~Gene

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

5 posted 2000-04-20 08:54 PM

Very good, Kaile!

Denise

INclan
Senior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

6 posted 2000-04-21 06:29 PM

Kaile,

Good writing, sorry the call wasn't for you.

INclan

PrincessPoet
Member

since 2000-04-15

Posts 133
Long Beach, Calif.

7 posted 2000-04-21 10:14 PM

Well, Done
(The nerve.uh)Don't let the quicksand sink you

Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up.
-Yoruba Proverb

Poetry & Friendship,
PrincessPoet

Mon Cherie

Senior Member

since 2001-10-31

Posts 922
Land of Never-ending Summers

8 posted 2001-12-04 02:45 PM

Ooh... If I were Eve, I would've hung up on him...

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