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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
A zephyr, a breeze drifting down to the town. The clouds are beginning to stack up and down. Intensified breeze, signals weather in store. The drizzle of rain, becomes now a downpour. The flash of a lightning bolt lights darkening sky. Above the noise of the rain, a birds mournful cry. Accelerating winds, whip nests from the boughs. Cacaphonic thunder , the storm is here now. Roiling boiling clouds ascend into space. Sun disappears, in this cauldron no place for light. Entangled power lines blue flashes erupt. Electrical mayhem, communications corrupt. Somewhere on high, a small rotation gets birth. Twisting, spiralling, sweeping down towards earth. The noise like a freight train chills to the bone. Humanity, frantically, cowering in homes. The tornado in furious helical form. Scavenges, trunks from roots they are torn. Spearing brick walls, as if made of glass. Roofs walls and floors, succumb to the blast. Screams of the living ,drowned in the noise. Revolving maelstrom's maintaining it's poise. The thundering storm is desroying all dreams. Catastophic destruction, reigning supreme. Groundspeed increasing, energy releasing, Devastation, annhilation, rotation decreasing. Whirlwind elevating, windspeed abateing, Liftoff completing, cacaphony declining. Debris scattered, memories strewn. Families shattered, relationships hewn. Searching, crying, calling out names Survivors grief stricken , taking the blame. One short year later, the town is reborn. Brand new houses bright green grass lawns. Broken trees still show, the path of destruction. Headstones testament,natures ten minute eruption. [This message has been edited by twinsgd (edited 04-15-2000).] |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is excellent!! I could just see all of what you described happening before my eyes! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Ecellent poem, Jack. Well described. I live too close to the mountains and they say it could never happen here, except two years ago, one touched down right in front of me (like 100 feet away) as i was driving home--good thing it was a little one. ~Gene |
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freckles Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 160Virginia USA |
Jack--Beautiful imagery. You did a wonderful job with this piece. You continually have such wonderful poetry. "Unto thine own self be true, and it must follow as the night, the day; thou cans't not be false to any man."---Shakespeare |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, Jack! Denise |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
this is nice... good imagery.. Hey, have you tried to write free verse? just is a little more free.. relaxed.. so u don't have to find a rhyme.. just one or two of those rhymes sound a little strained.. ^_^ Impressive use of words here twinsgd.. Lynne |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Excellent indeed Jack !  |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Marvelous imagery, Jack .... this is First Class writing ..... Excellent, indeed .... "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind." Maxwell Maltz |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Wow, what intensity, this is awesome writing you brought me right into this one, just what I needed to read after a whole night of thunderstorms sweeping through here keeping me awake...LOL |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
Lizzie,.....Thank you for the compliment Gene,.......Thank you and so pleased you did not get involved with one of these, my family crossed the path of one missing it by about ten minutes, in the raging thunderstorm they had no idea. Freckles.....Thank you...flattery like that will get you most anything...LOL Denise.......Thanks for reading and the compliment. Lynne........Thank you...I prefer to read rhyme and yes struggle lots for the rhymes and frequently fail . Munda........Thank you both so rewarding Pepper.......to be complimented by people so talented. Lost Dreamer..Thunderstorms are exciting, but my heart goes out to those involved with these devastating storms. Glad you enjoyed it thank you. Jack |
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